高考上海卷英语作文预测

高考上海卷英语作文预测（共11篇）

高考上海卷英语作文预测 篇1

Dear Bill,

Hearing that you are having trouble deciding which course to choose, the listening and speaking course, or the reading and writing course, I would recommend you to take the listening and speaking course first for the following reasons.

Firstly, from the perspective of efficiency, the speaking and listening course outweighs the reading and writing one because it is completely taught in Chinese. As it is known to all, the fastest way to pick up a language is to communicatewith local people in the target language. Taking the listening and speaking course would allow you to have a command of their daily topics and gain a large vocabulary in a relatively short time. When interacting with other people, the more mistakes you make, the more grammar rules you will grasp, which is also the foundation of reading and writing.

Moreover, if you choose the speaking one, you will have two lessons a week and it only takes 8 weeks compared to the reading class, which means you will be exposed to the language to a higher frequency but finish it in a shorter time. This may set aside more time for you to read more books and therefore access to more vocabulary.

Last but not least, in a speaking class, you will definitely have a better chance to make friends with other learners, exchanging your ideas and experience in the process andpracticing the words and grammar that you have recently picked up.

I hope my opinion would contribute a bit and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Enjoy your course!

Yours Sincerely

高考上海卷英语作文预测 篇2

湖北卷

2008年的《湖北省高考考试说明》告诉我们：英语科目的试卷结构与2007年的保持同步，即单选题由2007年前的15个缩减为10个，测试内容由过去的语法综合知识变为英语词汇的用法；同时，新增题型“完成句子”，替换掉原有的改错题型。可以说，2008年湖北卷整体来说不会有太大的变化，但“完成句子”却绝对是一个需要大家重视的题型。“完成句子”是填空题的一种形式，答案相对固定，有利于客观评分，难度略低于改错题型。按理说，这一题型的人均得分应该会高一些，但去年该题型的得分却让人大跌眼镜。湖北省该题人均得分为3分(满分15分)！可见，“完成句子”这个新题型，仍应引起大家的足够重视。

下面结合2007年的高考真题一起来看看该如何应对该题型：

整体理解概念

完成句子中一般都会有中文提示和英语单词提示。在完成句子时，不应仅凭其中的一个提示来答题，而要分析整个英文句子的结构以解题。例如：

35. He believes that children _____________(应允许……的学习) at their own pace. (allow)

分析：该题考查了“allow sb. to do sth.”结构，因主语children 和谓语动词allow 有逻辑上的动宾关系，即被动关系，所以要用被动语态。如果仅看汉语提示，很难辨别该题在考查被动语态。正确答案为：should/ought to/must be allowed to learn/study。

牢记固定搭配

完成句子的每一道题几乎都涉及了对动词搭配的考查。例如：

40. It is possible that the King of Stonehenge was linked to the stones: he ______(可能参与) in planning the monument or in helping transport and pull up the stones. (hand)

分析：该题是完成句子10道题中最难的一道题，难点在于考生不知道固定搭配“have a hand in...”有“参与，插手”的含义。(这句话实际上是高二英语下册中的原句。) 另外，此题还考查了“情态动词+现在完成时”表示对过去事实推测的用法。答案为：may/might/could have had a hand。

注意词汇的语言环境

在完成句子题中，词汇的语言环境实际上就是句型、句式。解这类题，一定要把给定的单词放到整个句子中来考虑。例如：

39. Not only _______(要帮助) the disabled to find jobs, but also medical treatment will be provided for those who need it. (give)

分析：此题巧妙地考查了考生对“not only...but also”句式的掌握。“Not only”引起的句子置于句首，该句的主谓要倒装；同时“not only”和“but also”引导的是两个并列的结构，所以前后两个句子的时态应该一致。而help与give之间又存在逻辑上的动宾关系，所以要用被动语态。正确答案为：will help be given to。

输出正确的书面形式

写的时候，一定要注意其中的每一个单词。如果结构都正确，个别单词出错，则只能得一半的分。所以，一句话写完之后，一定要多读几遍，认真检查。例如：

36. She has an excellent _______(对名字的记忆力), which helps her quite a lot in her work. (memory)

分析：本题考查结构为“memory for sth.”。考生大多对这个结构很熟悉，但却因“name”未用复数形式而失分，非常可惜。

综上所述，针对“完成句子”这一题型，一定要注意结合整个句子全面考虑来答题。

作者简介：

高考英语作文全国卷预测 篇3

For every girl, they dream to be a princess, just likethe one in the fairy tale.

对于每个女孩子来说，成为公主是她们的梦想，就像童话中的人物一样。

So they loss their weight, for the purpose of lookingperfect and thinner like the princess.

因此她们减肥，为了看起来如公主般的完美和苗条。

I have witnessed so many girls around me try hard to control their weight, in fact, they are notfat, but they just want to be thinner and thinner.

我目睹了身边很多的女孩子努力去控制体重，实际上，她们也不胖，但是他们就是想要变得越来越苗条。

They refuse to the delicious food, worrying about their body shapes all the time.

她们拒绝美味的食物，总是担忧着体型。

I would rather choose to be a normal girl, do what I want to do and eat what I like to eat, nomore burden about the outlook.

我宁愿成为一个普通的女孩子，做自己想做的，吃自己想吃的，对外表没有过多的负担。

Being happy is the most important, it makes my life meaningful.

开心才是最重要的，那让我的生活变得有意义。

高考英语作文全国卷2预测 篇4

近日你所在的学校开展了“为建设节约型社会献一计”主题活动，同学们提出了许多建议。请你根据以下要点：

1.不浪费粮食和纸张

2.尽量不使用方便筷、塑料袋

3.毕业生将书赠给低年级同学循环使用?

注意：

1.不要逐字翻译，可适当增加细节;

2.词数：120字左右，开头已经为你写好，不计入总词数;

3.参考词汇：方便筷disposable chopsticks

Recently，there has been an activity of “doing your bit for an energy-saving society” in our school. Our schoolmates are highly concerned about the increasing lack of energy and provide their own suggestions.

Some students suggest that we shouldn’t waste any food or paper, though they appear very easy to get. Meanwhile, some other students think it advisable to refuse to use disposable chopsticks and plastic bags. Besides, it is also strongly recommended that those used textbooks as well as reference books of graduates, which are still in good condition, not be thrown but recycled.

Actually, there are still quite a lot that we can easily do: say, try to take buses or ride bicycles instead of driving cars, etc. All of these will definitely help to build an energy-saving society.

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高考全国卷英语作文预测满分 篇5

Dear editor,

I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether students of Senior 3 should take physical exercise. 55% of the students think they should take exercise every day, such as doing morning exercises, playing ping-pong and basketball, but it shouldn’t take up too much time. Proper exercise can build up one’s body and reduce diseases. What’s more, sports let their brains have a rest so that they can study effectively.

On the other hand, 45% believe taking exercise is a waste of time and it is tiring. After having sports, they are much too excited for a long time to pay attention to their lessons. It’s also possible get hurt in sports.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

高考全国卷英语作文题目及预测 篇6

闻》栏目组写一封信。

72%，看电视 1. 提供给人们更加生动的画面;

2. 新闻报道直接、简洁。

12%，看报纸 1. 新闻报道比电视更具深度;

2. 看报纸不受时间限制;

3. 看报纸要动脑筋，有益于智力开发。

注意：1. 描述出不同的看法和观点;

2. 词数：100左右;

3. 参考词汇：调查—survey;智力—intelligence;生动的—vivid

【参考范文】

Dear Editor，

We did a survey on how people get news.For most of us today, television is our main source of

news.According to the survey on the ways of getting news, 72% of people watch TV, and only 12% read

newspapers.

Most people agree that TV presents more vivid pictures to the TV viewers.Besides, TV reports are very

direct and brief.However, some people think the newspaper is a better source of news in many ways.First of all,

newspapers can cover events in depth.Also,there is no time limit for reading a newspaper.In addition, readers use

their brains to follow and get a news report, which helps improve their intelligence.

In my opinion,watching TV is a better way to get news.

Yours,

Li Hua

高考英语作文全国卷二预测满分 篇7

When I was very small, I like to read the books withpictures, because I did not know the words.

在我还很小的时候，我喜欢看那些有图片的书，因为我还不认识字。

One day, I saw the interesting pictures in the book, Isaw the turtle and the rabbit, but I did not knowwhat it said, so I asked my mom.

有一天，我在一本书上看到了有趣的图片，我看到了乌龟和兔子，但是我不知道上面讲的是什么，因此我问妈妈。

She told me that the turtle and the rabbit were racing, I said there was no doubt that therabbit would win, but my mom smiled and said the turtle won at last because the rabbit was soconfident and slept for a while and missed the time.

她告诉我乌龟和兔子正在比赛，我说肯定是兔子赢，但是妈妈笑笑，说乌龟最后赢了，因为兔子那么自信，睡了一会，错过了时间。

I was shocked, I learned that lagging behind doesn’t mean lose, if we insist, we will have thechance to win.

我很震惊，我学到了落后并不意味着输，如果我们坚持，就有机会取得胜利。

2013年上海英语高考预测作文 篇8

（一）由于你的父母执意希望你报考本地名校，请以化名王小二的名义写一封信说服父母同意你报考清华大学

Jan, 1st, 2013

Dear parents,I know it’s a bit hard/difficult for you to accept my choice to apply to Tsinghua University(for further study).You have been taking good care of me during the past 18 years and in your eyes I’m a good boy who is always willing to follow your advice.But this time I do hope that you can allow me to make my own decision.Tsinghua University, one of the top universities worldwide, has appealed to numerous excellent applicants.Not only do they admire these distinguished scholars but also they can share the advanced teaching facilities and reference resources.In addition, graduates from Tsinghua are bound to have more chances to find rewarding jobs.In this competitive society，I can prove myself an outstanding talent and make great contributions to the development of our nation.I know you are worried that I can’t look after myself if I go to Tsinghua.However, this will enable me to learn how to live

independently and stand on my own feet.I really hope you can understand me and support my decision, which will benefit my future.Yours,Xiao Er Wang

2013 年上海英语高考预测作文范文

（二）有些重点中学为了在自主招生或直推中以示公正，往往会公布学生的成绩或排名，请就此现象谈谈你的看法。

With the adoption of the quality-education policy, many advanced teaching methods have been introduced to China, Meanwhile, many middle schools still find a good way to publicize to scores and ranks to introduce good candidates to key universities fairly.Competition is part of our modern life.If I know the exact position where I am, I will spare no effort to catch up with others.Besides, we will face the pressure that making scores publicized applies to us.We, Senior Three students, have no choice but to adapt ourselves to all the pressure, which helps us develop our full personality.Though no one is to blame except myself if the ranks are made known, test scores are private.In many experts’ eyes, individual student should have his own right of privacy.It’s time for education authority to create a better environment to promote quality-education, where every student can really improve himself.2013 年上海英语高考预测作文范文

（三）政府召集有关专家开会商讨如何解决交通拥堵，大家各抒己见：

一、私家车增多，应提高税收，控制数量。

二、路况恶劣，应扩建道路。

三、人车混行，应分道行驶。

For the sake/purpose of solving the traffic problem, the local government held a meeting recently, at which many experts had a full discussion and put forward valuable suggestions.First, they pointed out that the cause of serious traffic jam was due to the increasing number of private cars.They held/maintained that raising the tax rates of using cars was one of the most effective measures to limit this trend and people should be encouraged to make full use of public transportation.The second leading / contributing factor that the government couldn’t neglect was the poor road conditions.Narrow streets,inadequate traffic signs and false signal lights added to the trouble.It was suggested that old houses should be pulled down to make way for the traffic.What’s more, every day we could hear the endless running vehicles roaring through the narrow streets filled with anxious passing crowds.New regulations should be practically adopted to separate them for the sake of safety.All the experts present agreed that steps should be immediately taken to solve the problem effectively.2013 年上海英语高考预测作文范文

（四）上海是否应当仿效北京站奥运期间每周一天限行私家车，请阐述你的看法。

With the approach of Shanghai World Expo, what has caused the public concern is whether the local government should follow Beijing to take strict measures to restrict the use of private cars during the Olympics to solve the serious traffic problems.Shanghai experts have voiced different opinions about it, I hold that current traffic situation should be improved.First, as more and more private cars flood into cities, city services and facilities have been strained to a breaking point.Shanghai, the host city of the Expo, has been exposed not only to the problem of increasing population, but to the problem of the overcrowded traffic.A second problem is the physical environment.The growing number of private cars, whose exhaust sends huge quantities of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere, makes the air of cities unbreathable.All the action the committee will adopt just reflects the theme of 2010 Shanghai World Expo“Better cities, better lives”.So, what’s your choice?

2013 年上海英语高考预测作文范文

（五）Directions:以我的未来不是梦为题，字数不少于120字

Everyone has his own dream.My dream is to become ________.I think it is not for myself or my family but for all human beings._________ are specialists/ experts who are keen on _____ and ________.It is of great significance to be one of them and devote my time and energy to the cause of ________.I really hope that I can do something to ___________.Certainly, to be _________, I must have a better understanding of _______.For instance, I must have some basic knowledge of the ______, which are closely related to the ______.Besides, I will do what I can to arouse as many people’s ______ as possible so as to gain more support.From now on, I will make preparations for the future in order to realize my dream.2013 年上海英语高考预测作文范文

（六）Directions: Write an announcement to welcome student to join a club at least 120 words following the outline given below in Chinese.1.社团的主要活动内容

2.参加社团好处

3.如何加入社团

Do you want a different life against what you ever have? If so, join us.Our club is just for young people, whether boy or girl.And our club is named_______, where you can find ______ during the time when you are with us.In our club, there will be great fun _______, for example, sometimes we will get together to have _____, which is not only one style.We may have different ideas from all the members in our club.Sometimes maybe we can have a travel near our school.Of course if you want to go far away from our school is also ok.In our club, you will make new and more friends, and your life will be richer and more colourful.I can assure you that any time spent in our club will be a memorable experience.If you went to join us, you can go to room 201 in A Building or contact us by e-mail.Thank you.2013 年上海英语高考预测作文范文

（七）Directions: For this part, you are allowed 20 minutes to write a short essay entitled BBS and Middle school Students.You should write at least 120 words according to the outline given below in Chinese.1.BBS 成为很多中学生生活中必不可少的一部分2.BBS的主要功能3.BBS存在的问题

BBS and middle school students

Nowadays, with the population of computers among middle school students, BBS has become an indispensable part of their life.BBS is the abbreviation of bulletin board system.Its main function is to enable people to communicate on “boards”.Each authorized person can post articles on boards, or just reply other people’s posts.Students can discuss all kinds of topics on it, serious or easy.It can keep the students well-informed of the current events happening both in the world and on campus.What’s more, they can not only discuss and exchange opinions through BBS, but also make friends, sell and buy second-hand products.It serves as a splendid information center for middle school students.However, just as the saying goes: No garden without weeds.Not to mention the garden of BBS.It is not immune to some illegal and nasty information.For example, you always can see advertisements about looking for a substitute examinee on BBS.Besides, some students have spent so much time on posting on BBS that they even forgot eating and sleeping, which results in many adverse consequences.Anyhow, BBS indeed provides fertile soil for critical thinking, and encourages free speech of middle school students.Therefore, we should work together to make BBS a better place for communication.2013 年上海英语高考预测作文范文

（八）Direction:在成人仪式后，老师要求写一封信给父母，以表感恩之情。字数不少于120字。

June 1st,2013

春季高考英语试题上海卷 篇9

第Ⅰ卷   （共135分）

听力部分

听力部分（第1题―第20题，共30分，为参考分）。考试时间30分钟。

Ⅰ. Listening Comprehension

Part A Short Conversations

Directions:  In Part A. you will hear ten short conversations between two speakers. At the end of each conversation, a question will be asked about what was said. The conversation and the question will be spoken only once. After you hear a conversation and the question about it, read the four possible answers in your paper, and decide which one is the best answer to the question you have heard.

1．A．dressmaker.      B．A shopper.

C．A shop assistant   D．A student.

2．A．At  9：00        B．At  9：30

C．At  10：00     D．At 10：30

3．A．He doesn’t want to go.

B．He has to see the doctor.

C．He has to send Mary to hospital.

D．He has to take care of his brother.

4. A. Teacher and student.

B. Bookstore owner and customer.

C. Librarian and student.

D. Editor and reader.

5. A. To the classroom.

B. To the professor’s office.

C. To the cinema.

D. To the post office.

6. A. The man.

B. The children.

C. The woman.

D. The woman’s mother.

7. A. She is complaining he didn’t follow her advice.

B. She is complaining about the weather.

C. She is afraid he will fall ill.

D. She is telling him not to take any medicine.

8. A. Steve won a gold medal.

B. Steve didn’t win a gold medal.

C. Nobody was better than Steve.

D. Steve was ashamed of himself.

9. A. Ask for a picture.

上海卷高考作文 篇10

你是逊尼派的普什图少年阿米尔，他是什叶派的哈伊扎少年哈桑。你是敏感和个人化的，他是不耐烦和自卑的。你和他有太多的不同，但你有一点惊讶的相似之处—你和他都在追风筝。你追上了风筝，他挣脱了风筝;他为你数了数千万次，但他死后听到了。时间沉淀了遗憾。你从后悔中醒来，抓住自己，弥补过去，追逐未来。当我在故事开始时看到你和他一起追风筝时，我以为这会是一个超越种族和信仰的兄弟，但当我看到他被你扔掉时，我不知所措。我开始为他生气，为你的自私感到难过。如果他会抛弃你，我会想到这么好的十几岁。你不知道怎么珍惜它，然后他真的走了。

在你离开的那天，你看着他的车走开了。你没有描述我对哈桑的深刻记忆。站在原来的地方，你在你悲伤的时刻也充满了感情。我开始爱你。我知道你不愿意哈桑知道你在后悔。我期待着有一天你对他说了很长一段时间，期待着你和他是一个默契的好兄弟。但那只是我的期望。当你几十年后从美国回到喀布尔时，你没有机会再见到他。遗憾的是，当你从别人那里得知哈桑是你父亲的私生子时，我不知道你的感受，但我觉得你开始明白你错过了哈桑。

只是时间不能回头。想躲在海里的父亲仍然没有说出真相，永远离开了世界。你不能来找他说对不起。父亲把痛苦留给了你和哈桑，让你的矛盾深化了真相。哈桑已经恨了，你一定很自责。然而，时间可以沉淀遗憾，也可以写成熟的自我救赎。你决定照顾哈桑的孩子。你选择为陷入困境的阿富汗做出贡献。你又追了一只等了的风筝。你摆脱了遗憾，用你的努力和奉献来代替它。你不再是敏感和自私的年轻主人了。

2014上海卷高考作文 篇11

启蒙运动对人类文明发展的影响是巨大的。其间，思想家们提出了许多诸如“天赋人权”、“主权在民”的观点，倡导自由与平等。正是这场运动激发了法国大革命和美国独立战争，甚至影响到了中国近现代的种种革新。到了现在，几乎人人都认识到了自己有各种自由的权利，并且积极地选择自己想要走的人生道路，增加社会的多元性，取得了不错的效果。

但是，人难道是完全自由的吗？自由的限度又在哪里？我们固然能够有自由选择的机会，可我们选择的目的恰恰是为了过好人生，用小的自由来实现最大的不自由。

人不自由的原因或许有两点。首先就是我们承担的责任。萨特说过，人必定是要受自由之苦的，因为我们没有要求来到这个世界上，凡是自由的，就要为自己一切的行为负责，承担责任无疑是不易的，就像穿过沙漠，各人的方法道路或许不同，但终究无人得以逃脱。其次，人的不自由还来源于外部环境的影响。往大了说，人终有一死，且在生命中不会一帆风顺，这些都是个人无力控制的。往小了说，我们的家庭也是生来就既定了的，或贫或富，或高尚或卑微，对于社会底层的人来说，他们要想获得成功，就必须付出更大的努力，穿越“沙漠”。

这样想来，人的引以为傲的“自由”实在是太渺小了，甘地领导了印度独立革命，为的是什么？让几亿人能真切地体会到自然的人有多不自由吗？当然不是，我们对“自由”的争取，对自由的珍视，别有一番意义在其中，因为即使人终有一死，即使有无限的沙漠必须穿越，他在其中作出过了不小的努力，并获得了不小的成就。巴金在《<激流>总序》中说到，即使他常常觉得身边是无尽的黑暗，他也不孤独，不绝望。因为生活就像一股激流，开辟他的道路，穿过乱山碎石之间，人的力量固然无法胜天，那又为什么一定要“胜天”呢？对生活充满热情，对自由加以珍视，便能创造出自己的“激流”，对“不自由”的困难悲剧化作自由的积极“搏斗”。史铁生写到生死时更有意思，他说，上帝在创造生命时顺便保证了它的结果。如果在艰难时想到前面有个长长的假期在等着你，不是会很安慰吗？正是这样对不自由的调侃和直面，使得他在走人生之路时更加乐观，也更加自由。

不自由不是悲剧，而是对自由的注解，使人对自由加一份珍视，加一份热爱。直面不自由，才能理解生命的真谛。

得分 69 高分启示：本文跌宕起伏，思考深邃，写作素材运用自如。

文章开篇从自由落笔，历数自由思想给人类社会带来的种种影响，然后笔锋一转，突破常态思维，指出人们追寻的自由的实质：用小的自由来实现最大的不自由。进而分析人们不自由的两点原因——我们承担的责任和外部环境的影响。但并不意味人们会就此消沉，作者娴熟地运用有关甘地、巴金、史铁生的三段材料，论证了正是人们对不自由的正视，也即对自由的珍视，从而理解了生命的真谛，走向更加自由。全文结构严谨，语言畅通。

吾行吾道，虽远必至（68分）

大漠孤烟直，长河落日圆。

孤身于沙漠，周遭是波澜起伏的沙海，漫天黄沙高傲地席卷一切，抹平一切来访者的足迹，好像从未有人来过。是振长策疾驰，是亦步亦趋彳亍，是日夜兼程早日穿越，还是且行且思谨慎独步征途，穿越沙漠的道路方式可以自由挑选，但无论如何，你必须穿越。

这是多么大的困境！我们掌握了过程的自由，却又被决定了起点与终点。从眼前的高考，到人生纷至而来的成败、兴衰、荣辱皆只可尽人事以面对，不可期天意而逃避，甚至整个人生，无论是居庙堂之高，抑或处江湖之远，难免生死人灭，穿越人生这片沙漠，我们向死而生。

然而，我们却被上帝赋予了选择穿越沙漠的方式、道路的权力。我梦见过西西弗斯，他受天惩，推石至山顶却终将滑落，但就在他徒劳无获走下山时，他却给我欣赏他信手捕捉的一叶蝴蝶。这里蕴藏着人类全部的幸福。客观上，我们必须同唐僧一般经历九九八十一难而修其正果，必须直面人世的不公，社会的阴暗，生命的困顿，在天不在我。主观上，是卑贱的生存哲学，还是高扬的生命意志，则在我不在天。在穿越沙漠的过程中，我们有所沉吟，有所深思，有所经历，有所创造，有所使命，有所理想，有所践行，有所超越，即便是撞向铁幕的鸡蛋，也能有其价值。

孔子以木车的激情穿越沙漠，他不是不知道乱世春秋一切已不可为，但他仍怀着古典的崇高勇往直前；老子以老牛的散淡穿越沙漠，他深知无法唤醒甜寐于月光流转的苍生，仍旧以牧笛吹起晚岚。张载说：“士人臣为生民立命，为往圣继（绝）学，为万世开太平”，我却认为，只要是心怀着慧（惠）世济世之心，纵对黑暗之时局一无所念，却也不怍于父母授来的身体发肤，方孝孺深知其对燕王铮亮佩剑的弱小，却仍旧傲然于君王前玉碎，决不伏身于残暴下瓦全，他难以不选择失败的结局，但却用选择穿越沙漠道路和方式的仅有的自由向历史交了答卷。

行走在天地间，我们都是旅行着的陌生人，从远方来，到远方去，天下无处不为逆旅，人世无所不为考验，但，作为这宇宙的朝拜者，我们在不自由中仍有过程和态度的自由。我们仍可在黑暗中保有那宝贵的尊严。

祸福贫贵，天作主，我说了不算。一身正气，我作主，天说了不算。

得分 68 高分启示：本文语言工整，辞藻丰富，颇具文采。

文章引用诗句，起笔造境，仿佛置身于沙漠，接着紧扣材料，点出人生的自由与不自由处。接着以西西弗斯命运为起点，从客观与主观两个方面阐述“在天不在我”与“在我不在天”，揭示人们应该积极主动应对人生的道理。然后运用材料、信手拈来，以孔子、老子、张载和方孝孺的经历来印证。结尾戛然，掷地有声：面临人生的自由与不自由，我们的主观能动性是何等重要！强有力地向世人告白“一身正气，我作主”！

沙漠即在前方（68分）

眼前是黄沙弥漫，身后是退无可退，唯一的选择就是穿越沙漠。当然，你可以自由选择穿越的方式和道路。

这就是如今我们每个人的写照，人生只有往前这一个选择，唯一机动的是各人穿过人生这片沙漠的途径与方法。即以非自由之身拥有自由的选择，这是社会的法则。

放大了说人生也好，放小了说一段比赛也好，都必须具有一定的“不自由”，如规则，如规律。规则不可违，规律不可破。若是人生想退便退，随时可回到十八年华重做人生重要抉择，那这个世界岂不乱了套？这就是规律。若是赛跑途中由火箭送至终点的“第一名”也算冠军，这本来人类体能的竞赛还有何意义？这就是规则。

这样的“不自由”让我们及我们所在的社会更有序更公平，以更好地实现接下来的“自由”。是的，我们依然拥有自由，当你做人生抉择时，没有人规定你的抉择是什么；当你面对苦难时，更没有人教你该如何度过；当你面对辉煌时，没有人告诉你该如何处理。

苦难如文革十年，如何度过？才华横溢的女画家周炼霞文革时被迫害一只眼瞎，便托人刻了两枚章，一枚上写着“一目了然”，如此调侃，如此励志，她是这样度过了文革。而大作家老舍却不堪折磨抱石投湖自尽，如此惋惜，如此可叹，他是这样度过了文革，也提前度过了人生。文革就好比必经的沙漠，二人身处其位已无可选择，而方式却可变，苦难如斯又如何呢？挺一挺笑着便过来了，过来之后便得以颐养天年，九十多岁才去世。软一软哭着也过去了，提前过去，却仍是一个昏暗的结尾。

这儿的“自由”，便决定了当你穿过沙漠时看到的是一片可爱的绿洲，还是因怕吃苦走短路而看到的另一片更黑更干的沙漠。

当然人生也并非只有“苦难”这个沙漠，辉煌也是沙漠，你是如司马光一般淡然处之并写下《训俭示康》以提醒后辈，还是如现如今的高官一般大肆炫耀落得“双规”下场？天生聪慧也是沙漠，你是如曾经的科大少年班的“神童”们一样终归于默默无闻，还是像十三岁上清华的“范书恺”一样拥有才智的同时拥有较强的自理能力与处事能力，前景光明？

方式也好，道路也罢，这“不自由”中的“自由”却决定了你最终的结果。

我说我并不想要自由，此话不假，因为有些“不自由”保证了我的权利及义务更好地施行；我说我想要自由，此话当真，因为这些“自由”也决定了我的人生。

沙漠即在眼前，非自由之身的人们啊，抓紧手中的自由的权利，向前穿过沙漠吧！

得分 68 高分启示：本文语言辩证，思路清晰，理解深辟蹊径。

开篇对材料阐释如同水乳，自然而又深入地道出了社会生存的法则：以非自由之身拥有自由的选择。然后从小如规则、大到规律两方面揭示“不自由”的常态。籍此，作者又通过周炼霞和老舍两个事例，深入论述人们如何选择度过常态。最后拓开笔端，表明人生除了“苦难”之外，“辉煌”与“聪慧”都有可能是沙漠，思维广度上胜人一筹。文章材料较为充实，只老舍例的分析略有瑕疵。

自由的囚徒（65分）

少时，父母常让我尊敬爷爷，因为他是一位退伍军人。仅此原因自然难以说服我。我更多将敬意流于表面，未曾刻入心头。

懂事后，见爷爷的时间少了。我也放下担子，因不必佯装尊敬而舒心许多。深刻的沟通随着我的长大，愈来愈少。

高中后，时常困顿。学业负担重；初中好友疏远；与新学校格格不入。长大看似更加自由，实则成长中的我似在沙漠中穿行，时刻被流沙、狂风、酷热与严寒侵扰，无处可逃。但很可惜，没有别的选择。现实的生活与余华《活着》中的故事无二，我只有穿越这片沙漠才能或者，青春期的迷茫与不自由感让我痛不欲生却又无可奈何。

晚饭后例常下楼取来报纸，却惊喜地在信箱中发现了一封信。上面用苍劲的字体写着“孙儿亲启”。

心中文字我仍记得一些。

“……你与父母谈及你的不自由，我深有体味，我们皆是不自由囚徒，（从某种意义上来说）爷爷曾是哈军工的优秀毕业生，即将踏上无限光明的道路。可孙儿，海军士兵要在船舷上屹立不倒，而我却有先天平足的缺陷。所以我无法成为战场上的士兵，那时于一个从初生开始便梦想上战场的兵来说，是耻辱。”

读到此，似有凹凸不平的地方，大概是泪干后的印记。

“……但又怎样呢？我无法逃离这困境，若是逃避，倒真是士兵的耻！我的确不自由地必须突破这困境，穿过这困境，但从某种意义上来说，我也是自由的囚徒。人生的枷锁无法困住你以至你不可以用他去达到目的。摆脱困境，孙儿，我相信你勿做弱者！”

爷爷后来做了地图海图测绘工作，也算以别样方法突破了困境。

读罢信件的我，颇有感触，也心生敬意。但我不认为那是如同我所经历的一样无边的沙漠。我甚至自大地认为，我的无奈与不自由，胜过爷爷的故事。我试图穿越沙漠却没有方法，于是我不想再尝试

直到近日，我从父母口中听说爷爷骨折，便去看望他。当他解开绑带之后，我惊奇地发现他并不平足。爷爷编了故事来愚弄我！

我气愤地回了家，却在与父亲的争吵中如梦初醒： 爷爷被拒绝仅仅因为出身是地主。

我的惊讶远超愧怍，他的无奈我难以悟透。

之后故事向美好的方向发展，我也找寻到力量，也正满怀信心地在纸上落笔。

人生伊始，便是囚徒。我们必须选择挣脱。但我们有千种方式争脱，正如千奇百怪的人生路。实则我只有自由，我们也始终自由没有人选择坐着等死，我们已经做出了自己的选择！请自由地挣脱沉重的枷锁！我，将为我，也为敬爱的爷爷走出沙漠。

得分65 高分启示：本文通过叙述故事阐释对自由的思考，构思一波三折，颇能引人入胜。起笔欲扬先抑，对爷爷可谓貌恭而不心服。但随着事件的发展，爷爷的故事又交织着“我”的经历，使得“我”对爷爷的认识也逐渐产生了曲折的变化。结尾出人意料，道出了爷爷“地主出身”这一宿命，正如人们无法改变的“不自由”，启发自己如何挣脱新环境中迷茫自失的困境。文章以“自由的囚徒”为题，带有队自由的强烈思辩性。

独舞者（65分）

你有可能出生在一个并不属于你的时代，有可能你的思想有悖于当时的社会环境与思想准则，有可能你因受本我意识的冲动而创造了一个新流派……但若你是一位艺术家，又是拥有独立人格的，还恰巧具备了以上的任一条件，那你周围便已是一片荒野。

只有很少数的艺术家逃脱了这种无人道的遭遇，大多数的经历者即便有少许支持者、密友，他们都只能给予少量宽慰。

自小被宠为神童的莫扎特长大后到处碰壁，因为愚昧的奥地利国王说过：“我们不需要天才，我们只需要听指令，能为我们光宗耀祖的奴仆。”莫扎特不得不每天穿着绣金背心，搽着香粉按照皇帝的指令谱写一些轻浮如阉伶歌手法利内尔的女高音的宫廷轻歌剧，还要忍受教主的迫害，因为他有荣誉。最终他忍无可忍的与大教主决裂，离开了这被束缚的国土，挣脱了宫廷，远离了萨尔斯堡。

他以为他终于自由了，可他正面对着更加贫乏荒漠，得罪了主教这意味着他之后生活的永远艰辛，甚至是死亡。

莫扎特在给父亲的信中提到过“我绝不会再回去，我的人格对于我或对于你都是至上的，我必须穿越荒野，哪怕最后是用我的性命来交换，但是我可以有我自己的选择来追随我的本能灵感。”

他拼命的教学、接活、创作，生活的相当窘迫，柔情的他连到大自然中去寻求慰藉的机遇都很少，他仿佛被与他人隔离开，被迫成为“独创才”。

可他选择将内心的痛苦隐藏，将欢乐与眼泪融合把神坛的歌声传送给热爱他的人们。那是苦难之蚌孕育出来的珍珠，却从不夹杂暴怒与怨愤的迹象。

若不能生如夏花之灿烂，死如秋叶之静美也无妨。躲在冷冷清清的病床上的莫扎特喃喃自语道：“……现在，开始夜的咏叹调……”然后轻轻合上了双眼，挣脱了时间的束缚，回到了大天使的身边，而此时，威登歌剧院中金碧辉煌，舒适的包厢座无虚席，华美艳丽，名流们流光溢彩，《魔笛》的首演盛况空前。

他才是一颗耀眼的超新星，只是他身处宫廷教会勾连的黑洞，吞没了他那璀璨的明辉，他却以极差的姿态行走在他的白夜中，别人的荒野是他的舞台，而他是一位挑战的独舞者。

乌云试图掩盖太阳的光辉，可那混浊的阴霾却使太阳那远射的光明更加圣洁。经历的苦难与挫折固然不堪回首，但若为超越者，我愿视其为一场仲夏夜之梦。

得分 65 高分启示：文章是一种散文构思，以莫扎特的经历阐释对自由的思考。